I really wanted to like your book, because it's so very much up my alley in terms of subject matter. But the writing just didn't work for me, on a fundamental level: too much dialogue that didn't sound like things people would say, too many places where one paragraph didn't lead into the next, too many one-line paragraphs chopping the whole thing up into kindling.
Man, my batting average is not very good right now.
Man, my batting average is not very good right now.
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Date: 2012-07-26 07:00 am (UTC)One might equally suppose I'm likely to pick up books I know I'll enjoy, so as to improve my mood. But I don't think I've ever paid particular attention to that question before, such that I'd be able to say for sure if I have a pattern in one direction or the other.
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