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Jan. 21st, 2010 02:13 amI've started over on "And Blow Them at the Moon." As much as I like the opening scene I'd written, it just doesn't fit the story; it introduces an additional pov (a bad decision, if I want to keep this thing short) and the tone is too light-hearted. This is not, I fear, going to be a light-hearted story. Not given what happened to Father Garnet, and to the conspirators, in the end.
(Man, reading about the Gunpowder Plot is depressing. Especially Sir Everard Digby. Talk about a waste.)
So that's 614 words of a new start, and already I think it's better. Father Garnet praying in Thames Street, and Magrat confronting the fact that she is displaying conduct unbecoming to a church grim. I need to find a way to say more about him, but maybe that will fit into a later scene.
(Man, reading about the Gunpowder Plot is depressing. Especially Sir Everard Digby. Talk about a waste.)
So that's 614 words of a new start, and already I think it's better. Father Garnet praying in Thames Street, and Magrat confronting the fact that she is displaying conduct unbecoming to a church grim. I need to find a way to say more about him, but maybe that will fit into a later scene.
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Date: 2010-01-22 08:04 pm (UTC)And in the context of this particular event, James isn't the one I want to shake. It's Catesby and all the others. I understand they were persecuted, I understand their patience was at an end, but still. Inept they weren't, but they advised themselves very ill indeed.
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Date: 2010-01-23 12:36 pm (UTC)And the Plotters were equally careless.