Reasons I Have Quit Reading Your Book This Afternoon

I really wanted to like your book, because it's so very much up my alley in terms of subject matter. But the writing just didn't work for me, on a fundamental level: too much dialogue that didn't sound like things people would say, too many places where one paragraph didn't lead into the next, too many one-line paragraphs chopping the whole thing up into kindling.

Man, my batting average is not very good right now.