Aha, I found one online here from a few years back: "Foxfeast" [Mythic Delirium].
The first stanza ("There's nothing in it...") is just a statement of intent. I wanted the whole sentence on a single line by itself for impact.
The second stanza has the line breaks set up so that the alliterating m's ("Your merry"/ "your marrow" / "the machined") all hit at the second word/syllable.
For the third stanza, I broke the line after "blood" because I wanted to bookend "broth" and "blood," plus the pararhyme of "broth" and "breath" hitting at the beginnings of their respective lines.
Fourth stanza does bookending alliteration again in the first line ("Foxes" to "face"), ditto the fifth stanza ("Foxes" to "force"). The line breaks in the fourth and fifth stanzas are set up to make them sound rhythmically similar, plus putting alliterating words in roughly similar positions ("hundred hunched" vs. "hinges...heart" and "starwheel towers" vs. "stuttering tears").
Sixth stanza is pretty much a couplet with the pararhyme of "wires" and "wars."
Seventh stanza slant-rhymes "gnawed" and "knotted" in the first and second line endings, plus in the beginnings of the second and third lines I wanted the "your" to start the line for impact.
The first line of the eighth stanza ends at "feast" to form an across-two-stanzas pararhyme couplet with "fast" at the end of the seventh stanza, and I wanted "smiling"..."smiles" in a single line for deliberate repetition, and then it ends the final line with "first" to slant-rhyme with "feast" and "fast."
I don't know if this is helpful or enlightening? And also I actually sort of do prefer to write rhymed or at least metered verse, but there was no market for it so I tried my hand at free verse instead...? Happy to answer any questions.
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Date: 2018-02-23 10:35 pm (UTC)The first stanza ("There's nothing in it...") is just a statement of intent. I wanted the whole sentence on a single line by itself for impact.
The second stanza has the line breaks set up so that the alliterating m's ("Your merry"/ "your marrow" / "the machined") all hit at the second word/syllable.
For the third stanza, I broke the line after "blood" because I wanted to bookend "broth" and "blood," plus the pararhyme of "broth" and "breath" hitting at the beginnings of their respective lines.
Fourth stanza does bookending alliteration again in the first line ("Foxes" to "face"), ditto the fifth stanza ("Foxes" to "force"). The line breaks in the fourth and fifth stanzas are set up to make them sound rhythmically similar, plus putting alliterating words in roughly similar positions ("hundred hunched" vs. "hinges...heart" and "starwheel towers" vs. "stuttering tears").
Sixth stanza is pretty much a couplet with the pararhyme of "wires" and "wars."
Seventh stanza slant-rhymes "gnawed" and "knotted" in the first and second line endings, plus in the beginnings of the second and third lines I wanted the "your" to start the line for impact.
The first line of the eighth stanza ends at "feast" to form an across-two-stanzas pararhyme couplet with "fast" at the end of the seventh stanza, and I wanted "smiling"..."smiles" in a single line for deliberate repetition, and then it ends the final line with "first" to slant-rhyme with "feast" and "fast."
I don't know if this is helpful or enlightening? And also I actually sort of do prefer to write rhymed or at least metered verse, but there was no market for it so I tried my hand at free verse instead...? Happy to answer any questions.